Chapter 01: Welcome to Feddema Global
Ok I am just going to get started up. I will probably make a separate page that talks about who all the characters are, just so they’re all listed in one nice place. There’s a lot, even just in this one chapter! And who knows which ones are the main ones and which ones are important later. I’ll just do my best. But for now there’s is a ton to read and I know if I don’t get started I’ll keep putting it off! So here we go.
Chapter 01 is called Welcome to Feddema Global.
Link.
I’ll just explain what happens. We meet ALLISON HULL. [When we first meet people I’ll write their names IN ALL CAPS so they stand out.] She’s in a hotel and she receives a telegram. The weird thing is no one is supposed to know she’s there. The telegram says that her brother Hugo died. He was working for a company named Feddema global. The telegram is sent by someone named Margaret Feddema. They send her a train ticket so she can go “settle his affairs” whatever that means.
The train takes her to a city called Fort Hook, which is near where she and Hugo grew up. Allison thinks it’s weird that she didn’t know he was dead. When she arrives she makes a phone call to Margaret to say she’s in town. Then Allison suddenly gets kidnapped!
She wakes up in some kind of under water hotel room. A man named ANTHONY comes in and she thinks he is handsome and wants to have sex with him, but he says no thanks. He’s apparently just the butler.
Then she meets MARGARET FEDDEMA. She says that Hugo had to fake his death to work at Feddema, but now unfortunately he’s actually dead, of drowning. He was working as a courier and he died on a boat called the Black Bee, owned by someone named Frank Muto. Not sure if any of that’s important. We also learn that Allison and Hugo were from some kind of family of adventurers? It’s hard to tell, maybe solving mysteries or finding treasure or something. But they certainly come from an interesting background.
Then, it’s actually kind of a funny scene, where Allison explains how she would hurt Margaret and escape. And Margaret is not that impressed. But then Allison TRIES to hurt Margaret and escape! And this time Margaret is impressed and offers Allison Hugo’s old job.
Will she accept????
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Some thoughts:
One thing I noticed about this chapter is that “the sea” seems to be very important. Allison has a tattoo of waves. The room is under the ocean. Hugo was afraid of water but he drowned. Just somethign to think about.
Also I think I found one odd typo. Allison says “It’s seven steps the door.” She probably means seven steps TO the door? The interesting thing about the way the writer tells the story is you think maybe that’s an accident or maybe it’s going to be a clue to something later.
Anyways this was a long chapter—not a lot happens, but the author gives a lot of good details. I’m definitely intrigued! Is anyone else reading it have anythign to add?
—Rina
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